Jack Winters wastelander App

[Steam Username]: Sinnamon
[Steam ID]: STEAM_0:0:28333600
AGE: 27

-Species/Human or Robotic:  Cyborg

-Character Advantages/Talents: Doesn't have to eat or sleep due to cybernetic implants. Military training. Knows proper weapon maintenance.

-Character Disadvantages/Weaknesses:  Reliance on Alcohol , non Charismatic, Psychologically damaged to an extent
-Faction
[Keep in mind some faction characters may be
subject to becoming event characters to prevent our server
from becoming faction wars roleplay]:
Faction Options: EX-Brotherhood. Now wandering mercenary.

-Current Equipment: Custom painted T45D power armor, two spare fusion cores, .308 Winchester, three boxes of .308, survival backpack, four stimpacks.

-Backstory [10-20 Sentences Minimum:
"So, you want to know my story kid? I can tell you my story but it's going to be a long one but we have a while until sun up. You got your drink ready kid? Good. Well, my story starts pretty much the same as everyone else, I born into this hellhole we now call home but I was born into a much safer environment. I grew up in one of the safest yet more dangerous groups, The Brotherhood of Steel. Ah.. The Brotherhood, growing up with them was a enriching experience. Growing up with an education, clean food and water and being taught how to survive out in the wastes. There wasn't many other children when I was growing up so I had a pretty serious upbringing.

The rest of my childhood was kind of boring to me it was mostly being educated, taught how to use firearms and such. After all that training and education was completed, I was inducted into being an Initiate. I remember the Initiate training, getting up extremely early doing all this exercise and firearm drills and training to use Power Armour. I tell you, being trained to use Power Armour was my favorite part of the training since I found it to be the most useful as that saying goes, 'The best defense is a good offense.' But, those were the best parts of my time in the Brotherhood. I had a lot more bad times then good during my time patrolling around but I do have them to thank for finding two wastelanders I'll never forget about.

After I was promoted to Knight due to completing my initiate training, I was sent on my first patrol around the local area. We were ordered to not help the local people because they were not a part of our family but I was never one for really following orders like that. Anyway, while we were on patrol I ran into two dirty wastelanders named Veronica and Gerald. Now, these two saved my ass more times than I care to mention. While they didn't think too highly of the Brotherhood, it came with good reason since they were constantly harassed and put in danger by my ex-brothers and sisters.

Every time I went on patrol, I would always sneak extra food or supplies to give to them to ensure that they would survive. I would sit down and spend some time with them by helping them scavenge for food or give them protection if they needed something guarded. These two proved themselves worthy of joining  us, time and time again but because of the Brotherhood's recruitment policy of 'No outsiders', they had to live out in the harsh wasteland, eating dirty food and trying to find clean water so they wouldn't get sick. After  our friendships grew, I felt more loyal to these two then the actual Brotherhood . I eventually spent more time with those two rather than spending time with my actual family because these people had morals and weren't just looking out for themselves, they always had other people in mind when it came to survival.

Anyway, we are getting to the more crucial part of the story now. I found this little girl close to our home one day, she was cold, dirty and emaciated and fairly injured. This little girl's name is Eris. Yes, the name you see on the back of my power armor, that's the one. So, this little girl would be the fire that sparked a series of events that caused me to leave the Brotherhood. When I brought her back home to get her patched up and at least get some food and clean water into her system so her body would at least be brought back to a healthy state. After several days in the care of the medical staff, they deemed her to be healthy enough to be sent back out into the wastes. I, of course argued against this idea since I couldn't let a defenseless girl be sent back into the wastes because I wasn't an amoral piece of shit who wanted to send a little girl off to her fucking death. Instead I offered to take care of her, share my rations and water with her so they wouldn't even need to care about an extra mouth to feed. Keep in mind, I didn't exactly have to eat. Some implant from the scribes as a 'Test'.

Alright, the suns starting to come up so I'll finish up. After a while, she started working with the scribes to work on technology and repair some of our gear. I came back one day to find my armor painted by her. All pink and undamaged, I wish I could have kept it in better condition, but I was hoping she'd recognize it if she saw me walking around in it. So, a couple weeks after that I learned that Eris had run away from the Brotherhood because they believed she was working against us due to her going to visit Veronica and Gerald a lot by herself. They ordered me to go retrieve her or at least bring back her body as she was accused of treason. I just couldn't do it, so I swiped a few fusion cores, grabbed several boxes of .308 and my Winchester and going AWOL to find Eris. I'll tell you, I miss her a lot, she made an impact on my life, she felt like my own daughter. I kept her safe from harm, protecting her from anyone willing to harm her, even if they were Brotherhood. Anyway, several months later after scouring the wastes trying to find her, I find myself here escorting you through the swamp. Anyway kid, we better get moving."

While I appreciate the time put into this, I'm going to have to say that I wouldn't support it. For the kind of roleplay we're looking to host, I feel like this is going super overboard in terms of both gear and backstory.

Agreed, maybe later on in our story progression this character would fit. But at this point it seems a bit too much. But as of right now i'm going to have to say I cant support this app.

I'm not going to forward my support for this, and it's unlikely I ever will so long as it's running along these current lines. You should seriously fix up the application and fix the clarity errors that are present at the moment through some serious revision.

This seems like you're asking for way too much even to the point where I don't think it'd be plausible for when we get into the wasteland.

Let me just point out a few things I have an issue with.

-Species/Human or Robotic: Cyborg

I understand that you've tried to explain this in your backstory but it makes no sense. As far as I am aware, the Brotherhood of Steel would never do something like this. Enclave? Sure, I can see that happening but for the Brotherhood of Steel this seems very unlikely. Unless you can find me an example of this sort of thing actually happening, I'm going to put this down to a 'no'.

Custom painted T45D power armor

Again, to look at your backstory. Going AWOL would result in you being hunted down and killed, especially if you both took your power armor and by your backstory you're a scribe's personal pet project. By these means this would make you worth the hunt by the Brotherhood unless you somehow evaded them or your ditched the power armor but you haven't explained this. Explain how you escaped the Brotherhood a little better and I'll have no issue besides the whole cyborg thing.

After I was promoted to Knight due to completing my initiate training

This isn't how the Brotherhood ranking works. You have to prove yourself as an initiate before you are ranked up to Knight. I'd like to see this revised and explained.

I think that's all that I have to say about this. If there's anything else, I'll be sure to edit my post.

I've seen little if no change to this. So i'll just put you in pending.

Little to no change as been made to the application.
The Backstory doesn't fit any of the Fallout and lore and makes little sense. Sadly, this will be Denied.